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What Are Your Goals Today Writers??

21 Thursday Mar 2019

Posted by StephOBourbonWriter in Children's books, Just For Fun, NEWS, Novels, Writing (film & television)

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goalsmarch21

My goals are to write, relax and enjoy time with my new hubby–

I know that I’ve been gone awhile but I’ve been working on my new business.. see the logo.

More soon, but I am creating content for you, CREATIVES!!

I will make s separate post for that, in the meantime–time for Thursday goals!!

 

Happy writing!

Things That Are Wrong with Your Screenplay

10 Tuesday Dec 2013

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This is a link that was shared on social media, it has some great points on what can go wrong in your screenplay, but it is basically everything that is wrong with every story, even the ones that are made.

http://www.fastcocreate.com/3022129/all-the-things-that-are-wrong-with-your-screenplay-in-one-handy-infographic#1

My biggest issues when reading scripts are:

STORY There needs to be a story-period. It has to have a strong beginning, middle and end-period. No amount of special effects is going to help that no matter what Disney, Sony and other big studios show you. It’s one of my biggest pet peeves when people tell me they love a film and I ask them why and they say the 3D was awesome, or the FX were awesome. A screenplay needs to have a solid story.

Why are you telling this story?

What are you trying to say?

Why is this important to you?

Ask yourself these and more questions, and then you should have a good story.

And STOP reading every screenwriting book on how to tell a story, just tell a good story, get that done first, then you can go in and tweek for industry standards.

Second biggest mistake. CHARACTER. You have to have strong characters that have strong intentions, needs, wants, actions and dialogue. This is non negotiable-period. All your characters must have different voice and they must all have their own needs AND everything they do MUST move the story forward.

Don’t ever write anything because, “wouldn’t it be funny if” or “It would be cool if”.. No no no no.. don’t do it.

Female characters—this affects both men and woman.

MEN don’t put them in if they don’t move the story just to have your hero getting laid, it’s boring and overdone and contrary to why you went to films in high school, it does not sell tickets.Don’t put a female in just to please your girlfriend. Put her in because you NEED her to TELL THE STORY. See how it always goes back to story? If you do put in a female character, please make her realistic. Look around you, who are the women in your life? How would they act in a situation? Write that.

WOMEN stop writing female characters just because you think we need more. Ugh I am so sick of this too. I am sick to death of reading bad scripts with a woman lead that makes no sense. If you want to write a strong female, then write her, you are a female this shouldn’t be so hard and yet it seems to be that more and more scripts are written by women about women just to put a woman in a script. Sigh.

STRUCTURE didn’t I just say it didn’t matter? No I said it’s second to story, but it must be there. Read scripts tons of them and format correctly.

There are a million things that can go wrong with your script, or right with it, so just think before you submit about these things and things on that list, but don’t get so bogged down either that you never show your work to anyone.

GOOD LUCK!!

Getting Past a Reader-Screenwriting Errors Will Get You Tossed

25 Friday Oct 2013

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I just finished helping judge a screenwriting contest and the two biggest issues were:

Character-you must know your character and write in “their” voice not in yours. Yes you have to have a voice. Many great screenwriters have a voice, but every character is unique. Dialogue is such a huge part of character. I used to teach a class on it, I haven’t done it again, but can always go over dialogue with you for a discounted rate. It’s important, really important. 

Also in character, writers weren’t describing their characters. You NEED to describe them-what they are wearing, what they look like. Don’t tell us who they are, describe them or show us. 

Story-you must know what story you are telling. I read so many scripts with great premise but no story. Other issues were; bad first 10 pages-in reality a reader won’t go past page 5 if they don’t have to. Make those first pages count. Voice overs and flashbacks-get rid of them until you are established. Pacing-if you don’t know how to pace a story use Save the Cat or Contour to help you-I know it sounds weird, but when reading a lot of scripts, it is easy to get bored and want to move on-which will be a “pass”. Just thought I would share this insight, hope it helps. We all have these issues for sure.

Sadly you have to get past the reader. Readers are bored easily and since they have tons and tons of scripts to read, it is really easy to not get through a script that probably would make a great film. 

My advice is if you have the means, get your scripts covered. Join screenwriting groups and get your scripts reviewed by your peers, take classes and don’t be afraid to get rid of that genius scene if you need to. 

Don’t submit your first draft to contests. I am sad to say that even I did that in the past. It’s not a good idea.

Don’t ever write on the cover page or last page “million dollar award winning screenplay”. That’s like bragging about your I.Q. If it was true, you wouldn’t need to.

Use common sense people and you will get read, make these mistakes and I can pretty much promise that you will end up in the deleted emails, or waste basket by page 5.

Good luck and happy writing!

 

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